Describe It - Camp Experiences
Learning Objectives:
Level 3
- Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
- Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
- Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
- Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
Level 4.
- Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
- Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
- Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
- Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
Learning goals:
- To ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ the reader by painting a picture with words.
- A variety of sentence starters
- A variety of sentence lengths
- Edit and rework
- Effective peer checking and feedback
Whistling birds make waipara camp more alive. Finally trees were silent, and the rope was ready to go. Breathing deeply doesn't help in this situation. Putting make legs in a flexible position to make me rise higher. (woosh) leaving the lowest branch. Eventually reaching the top.
The ground sits with the air as the rope contacted with the pine-stones. (Click) the harnest unbuckled. Trotting over to the distressed log to sit in peace, after that amazing experience. Looking into Tim's bag to find my watch, and see the time. 1:25 nearly time to go back, to school making no noise as I place my Watch back in Tim's bag and continue to watch the people from my group climb.
Student Reflection:
Jonty, I like the way you have used language to describe your setting. I am able to create a picture in my mind as I read it. Your next step is to focus on your surface features when you re-read / edit. - Mrs HunterIn my writing one of my goals is Use different sentence types - simple, compound and some complex (L3) I did show this goal here because I had at least two of every sentence type in my goal. In my writing one of my goals is Use different sentence beginnings and lengths (L3) I did not show this goal here because Most of my sentences lengths were the same and It was hard to use different sentence beginnings because it was a show not tell. My next step is to go to more workshops that have my goals in it and focus more on my lengths and beginnings in my show don't tells. Teacher Comment: |
